A LITTLE BACKSTORY:
My collaborator (Miles in the credits below) has a "tune".
"Its done, I just need a quick demo". He thinks he has it sold.
Yeah, well I've walked this trail of tears before.
He has a chorus, and a chord progression that's some kind of "circle of fifths".
Only every trip thru the verse, the key changes; great.
And the verse, well it fits the chorus, but who wants to hear he can't afford brakes
on the jeep, the rent, blah, blah blah. And a melody of course, he can't carry a tune in a bucket.
So, I tell him, chorus is great, if we start the first stanza of the verse on the IV,
it will resolve to the I and we're golden. BUT, the verse storyline, not so good.
As in, I'll take a pass. However, if the singer is having "issues" with a gold digger
wife/girlfriend for instance; I think we might have a tune. The re-write comes back.
Jeff has hit the mark pretty well, I trim a little fat, add a couple of lines:
"She loves 'ol Benjamin better than me". One last issue, it opens with;
"She said she wants to leave me, but what the heck. She'll be back when I cash my check."
NO! I'm not stepping up to mic and sing; "What the heck" no, never going to happen!
So back to the drawing board;
"She says she's going to leave me, ???, she'll be back when I get paid".
His answer; "I'm being played". BINGO!
For those who think this might be misogynist, or somehow disrespectful?
Come on, if you haven't been is this relationship, surely you know someone who has.....
 

SHE SAID SHES GONNA LEAVE ME, I'M BEING PLAYED
SHE'LL BE BACK WHEN I GET PAID
WORK A LITTLE OVERTIME, TIME AN A HALF
I DON'T GET NOTHIN', JUST A PAIN IN THE ASS
IF I WAS SINGLE I'D BE ROLLIN' IN THE DOUGH
IT'S NEVER ENOUGH AND SHE LET'S ME KNOW

NEVER ENOUGH GAS IN THE TANK
NEVER ENOUGH MONEY IN THE BANK
NEVER ENOUGH JACK IN THE COKE
NEVER ENOUGH CIGARETTES TO SMOKE

PAID OFF THE WEDDIN' RING, IN TIME FOR HER TO HOCK IT
EVERYTIME I TURN MY BACK HER HAND'S IN MY POCKET
MY FRIENDS ALL SAY, ANY FOOL COULD SEE,
SHE LOVES OL' BENJAMIN BETTER THAN ME
WHATEVER I DO, I JUST CAN'T IT RIGHT
NEVER ENOUGH TIME FOR A LITTLE LOVIN' AT NIGHT

CHORUS

SHE'S BLOWIN' THROUGH MY CHECKBOOK, MY BACK'S AGAINST THE WALL
GOT ME LIVIN' ON A DIET OF NICOTINE AND ALCOHOL
THE THINGS SHE DOES, DON'T MAKE NO SENSE
I STARTED DRINKIN' IN SELF DEFENCE
NEVER ENOUGH HOURS IN THE DAY
TO MAKE THE MONEY FOR THE BILLS I CAN'T PAY

CHORUS

NEVER ENOUGH NO MATTER HOW I TRY
NEVER ENOUGH WHEN ITS MY TURN TO BUY
NEVER ENOUGH ALL I GET FROM YOU
NEVER ENOUGH NO MATTER WHAT I DO
 

Here's the usual technical notes for any who are interested.
The "clean" guitar on the left: Grosh EJ > S-Gear American Clean
The guitar on the right: PRS HBII > AmpliTube 5 MIni Plexi 20
The solo guitar: PRS Santana II > DVA Fifty Clean channel, dimed up pretty good.
MODO Bass; usually I use Trilian, I'm trying to expand my palette, I'm not "bonding" with EZBass...
Superior Drummer 3, thought I was gonna love the Black Beauty snare from "Legends",
this is the Cooley.
I played the guitars, did the vocals, programmed the drums and bass with the help of Superior & EZB.
Almost forgot, I played the cow bell, shaker and tamborine.